After analysing the two
essays, both essays possessed some similarities in discussing what is happiness
and how should one achieve happiness. Although both essays have their claims and
explanations, Ginny Graves is more persuasive as compared to Ruth Whippman due
to her informative tone, unbiased argument, and
reliability of her essay.
Firstly, when comparing
both essays, Graves persuaded her readers better when she wrote her essay with
an informing tone. She presented her essay with solutions toward happiness
which enable her readers to be convinced. “Allow happiness to bubble up
naturally by pursuing activities that dovetail with your values” (Graves, 2017,
Para 2) is an example of her solution. Since her reader is reading her article on
happiness, they are more interested in learning rather than reading it for
entertainment. In addition, she makes use of rhetorical questions which allows
readers to reflect on themselves and inform them that there are solutions to
the problems they might be facing. Being able to understand the problems with
solutions provided, there is no reason why her readers will not be persuaded. Unlike
Graves, Whippman included her personal experience into her essay causing her
tone to sound less professional. She mentioned, “after arriving friendless and
lonely from Britain to live in the United States” (Whippman, 2017, Para 1), which
is her own experience that not every reader can
relate to. Readers will not be persuaded when they cannot relate to her
personal experience. Hence Graves’ essay with informative tone will be able to
persuade readers with her rhetorical questions and solution compared to
Whippman’s personal sharing which her tone does not suit this topic well.
In addition, the
structure of Graves’ essay enhances her tone. “Pursue meaning, not happiness”, “Make
your brain a sunnier place” and “Stay rooted in the right now” (Graves, 2017)
are some of her headings used which highlights her main points. These headings
give readers a clear idea of
what she is going to talk about which goes well with her tone of informing. Whippman, on the other hand, does
not have a clear structure for her readers. She does not have clear topic
sentences as well which require her readers to read on to know what she is
trying to convey. Hence Graves, with her organized structure enhances her tone
persuaded her readers more than Whippman did.
unbiased essay persuaded her readers with relations to Whippman’s biased essay.
Graves did not criticise other points to substantiate her argument. “possibly
because striving to elevate your own joy can damage your connection with
others.” (Graves, 2017, Para 2) shows her agreement on others can be a reason
why people are not happy. By having a more neutral stand, her essay has more
persuasion. On the contrary, Whippman
did not handle her arguments well. She fails to balance them which display her
biasness to her reader. “Because far from confirming our insistence that
“happiness comes from within,” a wide body of research tells us almost the
exact opposite.” (Whippman, 2017, Para 11) appear to her reader that happiness
is not within. She did not
explain this claim which shows her biasness. Having such bias argument is weak in
persuading her readers. Therefore, Graves who had a neutral, unbiased stand
will persuade readers as compared to Whippman who is biased.
Lastly, Graves’ essay
contains more references from professionals which will persuade readers more
than Whippman’s essay. Graves’ points are mostly supported by various
professionals such as Susan David, PhD, Mallika Chopra, founder of Intent.com and author
of Living with Intent (Graves,
2017, Para 2&3). These professionals did researches on happiness and some
published their own books on it. Graves
referenced from their work give her readers a sense of reliability. When there
is reliability on the content she posts, her readers will be convinced.
Comparing this to Whippman who lacked citations and references, readers reading
her essay may doubt her reliability.
Most of her arguments are not cited, for example in “Study after study shows…”
(Whippman, 2017, Para 13), she did not provide any evidence regarding the study.
Hence her reader will not know what kind of study was conducted. Therefore,
Graves’ essay who supported her claims with credible and reliable sources persuaded
her readers well, comparing to Whippman who failed to provide evidence for most
of her claims.
Looking at the aforementioned
points, we can see that Graves’ tone and structure are more appropriate for
this topic. Secondly, she has an objective viewpoint which she managed to
balance her argument. Lastly, she substantiates her claims with evidence which
bring accuracy and reliability to her essay. All in all, to conclude, Graves
essay presented to be more persuasive to her audience.
Graves, G. (2017). The Secret to
Deeper Happiness Is Simpler Than You Might Think. online Health.com.
Available at: http://www.health.com/mind-body/find-deeper-happiness Accessed
28 Jan. 2018.
Whippman, R. (2017). Happiness Is
Other People. online Nytimes.com. Available at:
Accessed 27 Jan. 2018.